Reflecting on Peer Response Workshop #2: Revision Plan

Griselda Mercado

English 250 B

Huerta

Learning blog 8

1. By reading the essays of some of my peers, I

2. My peers told me that my thesis is pretty good, but I am going to change it completely, I’m going to put my own words on my thesis, my own ideas, I’m going to introduce the writers I have in my essay in my body paragraphs.

3. Yes, my peers told me to that my weakest paragraph didn’t have enough evidence, and that I need to integrate direct quotes in some. I plan on improving my paragraph by better explaining my point, and thinking of better examples, or explaining why I used the ones I put.

4. Sort of. I tried to put just one point, information for that point, and explanation. I forgot to do that on my last paragraph, that’s why it’s my worst.

5. Based on my peers response I think the best part of my essay would be my introduction, but I still have to fix it up a bit.

6. I think the part of my essay I should spend more time revising are my body paragraphs I need to make sure that my examples prove my point, and I have to explain my quotes, and how they relate to my point.

7. I asked my peers if the quotes I integrated went with my point on each paragraph, my peers said that they did, except for my weakest paragraph, because it is unclear how my example ties in with my point. I am going to revise my third paragraph, and look for a better example.